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Entertainment & Artistry => Words => Topic started by: Jake on May 21, 2005, 12:58:03 PM

Title: Pre Poet
Post by: Jake on May 21, 2005, 12:58:03 PM

edit:: I reposted with the second draft.


Pre Poet

He wanted to
learn,
but did not
know how.

Not that he did not know how –
he was afraid.
Afraid of
failure.
Afraid of
himself and
what he'll
find out.

Afraid of reaching
within; of prying
inner most
desires
wants and
thoughts.

Laying

them
down for all to
see –

afraid still, he
fights for the

legend

that is
him and his
DREAM.

Title: Pre Poet
Post by: Ken Fitlike on May 22, 2005, 05:32:01 AM

Very succinct, relying on structure alone for emphasis - interesting. I like its simplicity and directness more than some of your other 'heavier' introspections.

Title: Pre Poet
Post by: Jake on May 22, 2005, 10:10:50 AM

Quote from: Ken Fitlike

Very succinct, relying on structure alone for emphasis - interesting. I like its simplicity and directness more than some of your other 'heavier' introspections.

this one still needs work, but it is on its way. I'm going through a big change, but more on that sometime tonite when I get back home from work - if you care to read of course ;)