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Stephen

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Re: Words not to use...
« Reply #15 on: March 04, 2008, 11:58:45 AM »
In most areas of creative writing, states of being are discouraged when describing character trait or state.

Rather than saying, "She WAS worried," you'd say, "She hurried to the freezer and pulled out a gallon of Charitably Chocolate ice cream. It was empty within the hour."

So, action rather than description.

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Re: Words not to use...
« Reply #16 on: March 04, 2008, 12:06:21 PM »
Unless you set it up earlier that she was one to eat while she was worried that sentance tells me nothing other then she is a fat pig that eats gallons of icecream at a time.

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Re: Words not to use...
« Reply #17 on: March 04, 2008, 12:17:02 PM »
Well, if you put her in a situation where one would normally be worried, the implications are obvious. She eats ice cream when she's worried.

I've still never been successful at anything creative writing, though, so I'm really just quoting authority.

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Re: Words not to use...
« Reply #18 on: March 04, 2008, 12:27:32 PM »
fuck creative writing ;)

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Re: Words not to use...
« Reply #19 on: March 04, 2008, 12:52:05 PM »
Absolutely.

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Re: Words not to use...
« Reply #20 on: March 04, 2008, 01:16:18 PM »
"could care less"

Yeah it makes sense but if you *could* care less, why don't you? I mean I've only seen this used where normal people would say "I couldn't care less".

Or am I the only one who gets annoyed with this.

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Re: Words not to use...
« Reply #21 on: March 04, 2008, 01:19:16 PM »
No, that kills me too.

My roommate's been pissing me off by saying, "take one from the team." Terrible phrase to begin with, let's not make it worse.

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Re: Words not to use...
« Reply #22 on: March 09, 2008, 05:16:12 PM »
Stealthy, are you getting into journalism? In any case, I'm in an editing class right now where taking out redundancies like "armed gunman" is just good practice.

Here's a link to my teacher's blog posting, in which he lists a bunch of redundancies: http://editingmonks.blogspot.com/2006/02/concision-precision.html
edit: and another, http://editingmonks.blogspot.com/2008/01/exercise-in-redundancies-tautologies.html

"ATM machine" and "PIN number" have always been favorites of mine, although in the second link, "violent brawl" is pretty good. Notice how you don't see my post on that assignment...oops!

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Re: Words not to use...
« Reply #23 on: March 13, 2008, 12:00:38 AM »
>> Stealthy, are you getting into journalism? <<

Yeah, I'm enrolled in a Bachelor of Journalism at QUT.  It's quite strange writing news copy, it really looks a lot easier than it actually is. 

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Re: Words not to use...
« Reply #24 on: March 13, 2008, 12:21:48 PM »
>at QUT


man, I wish they went for the full information technology name, then it'd be QUIT.

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Re: Words not to use...
« Reply #25 on: March 23, 2008, 11:50:04 PM »
>> Stealthy, are you getting into journalism? <<

Yeah, I'm enrolled in a Bachelor of Journalism at QUT.  It's quite strange writing news copy, it really looks a lot easier than it actually is. 

Most definitely. If you're looking for a job in journalism, might I suggest bragging about your computer skills as much as possible?

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Re: Words not to use...
« Reply #26 on: March 24, 2008, 05:09:08 AM »
I think that class might be my worst nightmare Ken  :screwy:
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Re: Words not to use...
« Reply #27 on: March 31, 2008, 10:36:08 PM »
if gilmore girls is anything to go by, journalism is not an easy field to break into...
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Re: Words not to use...
« Reply #28 on: March 31, 2008, 11:00:37 PM »
>> Stealthy, are you getting into journalism? <<

Yeah, I'm enrolled in a Bachelor of Journalism at QUT.  It's quite strange writing news copy, it really looks a lot easier than it actually is. 

Most definitely. If you're looking for a job in journalism, might I suggest bragging about your computer skills as much as possible?

That won't be hard as I've been working in IT for close to 10 years and have a degree already! Not much bragging required I hope.