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Jake
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A suicide story
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September 16, 2005, 11:28:59 AM »
a little bit of an experiment. Let me know what you think
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Ken Fitlike
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Ebeneezer McScrooge
A suicide story
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September 16, 2005, 11:36:30 AM »
That's quite readable, axon. I liked the first version/perspective most but it's very interesting to follow your exploration of the experience through the other viewpoints.
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And what rough beast, its hour come round at last,
Slouches towards Bethlehem to be born?.
drakkenkorin
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A suicide story
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September 16, 2005, 03:18:17 PM »
and why did you use "worm" instead of "warm" typo or foreshadowing?
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Jake
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