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Entertainment & Artistry => Words => Topic started by: micah on March 04, 2019, 09:51:17 PM

Title: Three short poems
Post by: micah on March 04, 2019, 09:51:17 PM
I've never been good at writing poetry, so sorry for the cliche simple rhyming patterns.

A stone can never wish to be
A stone may wish, though just can't be
a boulder strong and large
like steadfast boulders; large.
Yet only hope to weather now through
The torrent floods that charge.
While dDashed across those grandest envied rocks
And washed to worlds unknown
A pebble now with hopeless dreams
To be a simple stone.

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I’ve heard a thousand songs lament
and cry of crushing pain
The countless anguished written words
That poets etched in vain
Naive, I thought I understood
The aching artist’s heart
What untold voices failed to teach
Now time and life impart.

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Deception, like an ember drifting
Unseen in the breeze
Landing in a tired woods
It soon consumes the trees
Cloaked in ash what still remains
Which took so long to grow
The tired forest all but lost
From one small embers glow.
Title: Re: Three short poems
Post by: Jake on May 21, 2019, 12:14:02 AM
I must have missed this post initially, too bad.

Micah, I think these are quite good! I especially enjoyed the first one. Simple but with nice imagery. I think with some more work this one can really turn into something special! I think you need to think what the message should be, because it does leave me a bit confused. On the one hand the stone cannot wish, but after its turbulent life which made it small now it can wish to be what it was. I don't quite follow.

Either way, thumbsup!
Title: Re: Three short poems
Post by: micah on August 04, 2019, 11:29:51 PM
...it does leave me a bit confused. On the one hand the stone cannot wish, but after its turbulent life which made it small now it can wish to be what it was. I don't quite follow.

Edited original post to add clarity.  The stone could wish at the beginning, but it was futile.

Edit: hmm, just re-read it a few hours later and now it screws up the middle. needs more work.