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Jake

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Solitude and youth
« on: July 21, 2005, 01:27:39 AM »
solitude and youth

lone -
li -
ness.

second worst feeling
experienced in my short life
directly trailing in the
spiteful
footsteps of unrequited love.

yearning for solitude for so long,
and now,
that It is with me, I cannot manage its
awesome weight. It
stares
me in the face with the brilliance of the
desert night's eyes, and I cannot handle It.

lone –
some.

the feeling creeps deeper into the heart as
I beg for
sleep
to come quick
to bring morning upon me
and all who aren't around for
hundreds of miles.

now I yearn for dream and nothing more
hopeful that someone will visit me
there.
Do not follow where the path may lead. Go instead where there is no path and leave a trail.

Ken Fitlike

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Solitude and youth
« Reply #1 on: July 21, 2005, 07:21:10 AM »
Maudlin, though the arrangement of words is interesting enough.
And what rough beast, its hour come round at last,
Slouches towards Bethlehem to be born?.

Jake

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Solitude and youth
« Reply #2 on: July 21, 2005, 11:51:14 AM »
>>Maudlin<<

thanks for this word...its pretty cool :) I really like the sound.

>>though the arrangement of words is interesting enough.<<

overall, it needs more work...I'm not sure where I really want to go with this one.
Do not follow where the path may lead. Go instead where there is no path and leave a trail.