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« on: July 30, 2005, 07:41:16 PM »
Hello.

I know that you

don't know me but I

Just moved in below we

Met earlier in the launderette and

Although I don't know your name yet

I wanted you to know that

You've ripped my heart to pieces like a

Savage beast with teeth that rip

A scarlet liquid drips beneath

A single look from you could take the

Very breath, the thoughts I make and

Even though you take the paper wings I fly on

Burn them in flames like a child with fire I

Need to bare my very soul my

Torment magnified, my anguish whole.

Your eyes burn through me, filled with sorrow,

'Now what the hell do you want to borrow'

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« Reply #1 on: July 30, 2005, 07:41:41 PM »
Yeah, I know. The ending sucked. Sue me.

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« Reply #2 on: July 30, 2005, 08:14:30 PM »
heh, i liked the ending :)

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« Reply #3 on: July 31, 2005, 07:16:22 PM »
The ending was the best part :)

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« Reply #4 on: August 01, 2005, 02:51:45 PM »
How can your heart be ripped to pieces when you're a self described heartless bastard?
Go with the bad joke theory - RoD

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« Reply #5 on: August 01, 2005, 04:44:16 PM »
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How can your heart be ripped to pieces when you're a self described heartless bastard?


Not my description.  :(

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« Reply #6 on: August 01, 2005, 05:47:39 PM »
What does your signature say, then?
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« Reply #7 on: August 01, 2005, 06:16:28 PM »
"With internet bands subverting major labels, we'll have all sorts of garage bands starting up, and no one to sort out the good ones from the bad for everyone!"

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« Reply #8 on: August 01, 2005, 06:32:15 PM »
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What does your signature say, then?


My user title says Heartless Bastard

I like the bit a few pages later where he wishes cancer on me. And I'm the heartless one. Fuckstick. :rolleyes:

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« Reply #9 on: August 01, 2005, 07:39:05 PM »
Ok, sorry, didn't mean to be mean.
Go with the bad joke theory - RoD

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« Reply #10 on: August 02, 2005, 03:45:43 AM »
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Ok, sorry, didn't mean to be mean.


Oh, no problem from there! I wouldn't have used it as my title if I wasn't amused by it.

Just for clarity, the fuckstick comment was aimed at teh CP poster, not you.

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« Reply #11 on: August 02, 2005, 02:27:10 PM »
I wondered where that originated... (hilarious bastard, maybe).

Witty ditty, too.
And what rough beast, its hour come round at last,
Slouches towards Bethlehem to be born?.

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« Reply #12 on: August 24, 2005, 12:51:21 PM »
sorry it took me such a long time to respond (haven't been on the net that much lately) but the poem is great. The ending is quite great filled with desparation. The poem describes a feeling that I'm sure everyone of us has had...great :)
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