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Entertainment & Artistry => Words => Topic started by: Rob on July 30, 2005, 07:41:16 PM

Title: A poem wot I writ.
Post by: Rob on July 30, 2005, 07:41:16 PM: Hello.

I know that you

don't know me but I

Just moved in below we

Met earlier in the launderette and

Although I don't know your name yet

I wanted you to know that

You've ripped my heart to pieces like a

Savage beast with teeth that rip

A scarlet liquid drips beneath

A single look from you could take the

Very breath, the thoughts I make and

Even though you take the paper wings I fly on

Burn them in flames like a child with fire I

Need to bare my very soul my

Torment magnified, my anguish whole.

Your eyes burn through me, filled with sorrow,

'Now what the hell do you want to borrow'
Title: A poem wot I writ.
Post by: Rob on July 30, 2005, 07:41:41 PM: Yeah, I know. The ending sucked. Sue me.
Title: A poem wot I writ.
Post by: Perspective on July 30, 2005, 08:14:30 PM: heh, i liked the ending :)
Title: A poem wot I writ.
Post by: -KEN- on July 31, 2005, 07:16:22 PM: The ending was the best part :)
Title: A poem wot I writ.
Post by: salvelinus on August 01, 2005, 02:51:45 PM: How can your heart be ripped to pieces when you're a self described heartless bastard?
Title: A poem wot I writ.
Post by: Rob on August 01, 2005, 04:44:16 PM: Quote from: salvelinus
How can your heart be ripped to pieces when you're a self described heartless bastard?

Not my description. :(
Title: A poem wot I writ.
Post by: salvelinus on August 01, 2005, 05:47:39 PM: What does your signature say, then?
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Post by: ygfperson on August 01, 2005, 06:16:28 PM: "With internet bands subverting major labels, we'll have all sorts of garage bands starting up, and no one to sort out the good ones from the bad for everyone!"
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Post by: Rob on August 01, 2005, 06:32:15 PM: Quote from: salvelinus
What does your signature say, then?

My user title says Heartless Bastard (http://cboard.cprogramming.com/showthread.php?t=65429&page=4&pp=15)

I like the bit a few pages later where he wishes cancer on me. And I'm the heartless one. Fuckstick. :rolleyes:
Title: A poem wot I writ.
Post by: salvelinus on August 01, 2005, 07:39:05 PM: Ok, sorry, didn't mean to be mean.
Title: A poem wot I writ.
Post by: Rob on August 02, 2005, 03:45:43 AM: Quote from: salvelinus
Ok, sorry, didn't mean to be mean.

Oh, no problem from there! I wouldn't have used it as my title if I wasn't amused by it.

Just for clarity, the fuckstick comment was aimed at teh CP poster, not you.
Title: A poem wot I writ.
Post by: Ken Fitlike on August 02, 2005, 02:27:10 PM: I wondered where that originated... (hilarious bastard, maybe).

Witty ditty, too.
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Post by: Jake on August 24, 2005, 12:51:21 PM: sorry it took me such a long time to respond (haven't been on the net that much lately) but the poem is great. The ending is quite great filled with desparation. The poem describes a feeling that I'm sure everyone of us has had...great :)