Um, sorry, appears to have a good idea but doesn't quite accomplish it. Good poetry isn't a rant, unless you're a very, very good poet.
Poetry needs something to connect, and again, unless you're a very, very good poet, needs a way to make your idea concrete.
"Do I dare to eat a peach?", at least in the contextof the rest of the poem, is classic.
thanks for the comments, but I don't quite understand what you mean. What is "good poetry"? how would you define it? I mean, there is no universally "good" poetry - some people might find a particular poem great, and some might think its horrible.
Also, I don't think that my poem is a rant; how did you get to that conclusion.
I guess what I'm saying is a poem should encapsulate an experience, mood, etc, in as few words as possible.
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I don't agree with the first part of this statement. Who said a poem
should do anything? and don't you agree that most poem encapsulate ideas?
i don't know, seems a bit stylee over substance to me. but it's good though.
thanks. There are still major kinks I need to work out in it.
But truthfully, I think it is the most honest poem I've ever written. Actually, the poem has written me...
