Author Topic: A suicide story  (Read 2949 times)

Jake

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A suicide story
« on: September 16, 2005, 11:28:59 AM »
a little bit of an experiment. Let me know what you think :)
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Ken Fitlike

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A suicide story
« Reply #1 on: September 16, 2005, 11:36:30 AM »
That's quite readable, axon. I liked the first version/perspective most but it's very interesting to follow your exploration of the experience through the other viewpoints.
And what rough beast, its hour come round at last,
Slouches towards Bethlehem to be born?.

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« Reply #2 on: September 16, 2005, 03:18:17 PM »
and why did you use "worm" instead of "warm"  typo or foreshadowing?
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Jake

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A suicide story
« Reply #3 on: September 16, 2005, 03:29:00 PM »
typo :(
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